Grey
New lyrics.
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The final bell has faded away,
Flowing into oblivion
Like a river through its delta.
No motion.
No thought.
No vision.
No emotion.
The symphony is over.
Haunting melodies
And dark chords are silent.
But the metronome continues on.
The metronome continues on.
The metronome continues on.
The metronome continues on.
The metronome continues on.
***
***
The final bell has faded away,
Flowing into oblivion
Like a river through its delta.
No motion.
No thought.
No vision.
No emotion.
The symphony is over.
Haunting melodies
And dark chords are silent.
But the metronome continues on.
The metronome continues on.
The metronome continues on.
The metronome continues on.
The metronome continues on.
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6 Comments:
do you think you could type the melody...
daa dadii dooo baup
badoo yezaow skee nop
is it eels-esque with a happy melody? or more like emo for emos?
otherwise, I'll need a metaphorical spoon to metaphorically gag my cerebrum.
No, no, no. You missed the point. I asked for comments on these lyrics, but the confident critic signs his posts when posting negative feedback. That way, I can channel enough hate karma in your direction to cripple a double-hawk.
we've been thru this - I'm not anonymous, I'm outside of Google's marketing database.
Hmmm...it's kind of difficult for me to constructively crticize this piece because it sways me to neither one side or another. It doesn't affect me. I think this is in part because I prefer lyrics (and poems for that matter) that experiment with language and syntax. Interesting word usage; lines that hit me with their significance; those things are generally what catch my attention. I enjoy e e cummings but am indifferent about Langston Hughes.
It also may be that these lyrics--much like Bjork's--work better when in a song, so I think I should reserve any judgements until I hear them in that context. Of course, I could attempt to form into words my opinion, if you still find it relevent after reading my uncertanties above.
You didn't have to sell out, fool. You just need to sign your posts so I know it's you and not some other random engineering schmuck.
Ethan: the lyrics are intended to convey a sense of hollowness, so I guess their not swaying you is akin to what I was aiming for. The music (what I have of it, anyway) conveys the same sort of image. Not sorrow, anger, or anything else. Just emptiness.
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